Preposition: Crazy from start to finish.
Dependent: Because I didn't do my homework, when the teach wanted me to turn it in, I was punished.
Repetition: The man who is responsible for his family was once a man in school just like his daughter, a man who was in the military just like his son.
1. Which of the following doesn't work? Why.
a. Bill played a musical number by Bach; Joan, Beethoven.
b. Lou Williams was in for adultery; John Jones for gambling.
c. His mother told him to rent a car; his sister, to pack the suitcases.
A doesn't match with the previous phrase.
2. Write your own original example.
The boy and girl each bought a new pair of shoes; hers, green ones; his, black ones.
3. Find one from something you have read (this may take a couple of weeks).
Exercise
Write a short 4-5 sentence paragraph concerning your reading about Frankenstein. Include a colon.
The first four letters and the preface I read weren't mainly about the story: It covered the intention of the writing and background of the narrator. It starts with an exploration of the narrator and covers a lot of topics through his letters. For example, loneliness, risks taken by discovery of new knowledge, and etc. It seems like the letters are foreshadowing what's coming up in the future of this book.
-- The following sentence has a lengthy series joined by repeated possessive pronouns. Do you think the sentenceis effective or weak? What feature contributes strength or detracts from te rhetorical effectiveness?
"Walled off from the roaring traffic of the Embankment and Fleet Street and High Holborn, each Inn is a self-centered community with its own gardens, lush with cherry and magnolia, camelia, and crocus; its own library; its own dining hall; its labyrinth of walks and lawns; its blocks of offices and flats let out mostly to barristers." Robert Wernick, Smithsonian, May 1992
I think it's a good sentence. The grammar's all right. (The way he labeled the title, etc) The sentence is descriptive and interesting. It's not boring. It's written in style. Thus I think it's an effective sentence. The repetition and rhyme makes the sentence flow smoothly. It's vivid descriptions make the sentence more effective. But it kind of sounds like a run on sentence.
Dec 1st
EXERCISE -- Copy and paste this entire exercise into your own page. Write your answers in a different color or font. We will chose two people's in class to go over.
1. Look carefully at the following sentence. Does it work? If so, why? If not, where can the sentence be broken into two or shorter ones that are not overwhelming.
Robert Mondavi's father, Cesare, came from Sassafarento near Ancona, on the Adriatic coast of the Marches -- not a particularly rich or fertile part of Italy even now, nor, except for Verdicchio, much of a wine-growing region, and a good deal less so, no doubt, in 1883, when Cesare was born, the son of a large, simple family and possibly the first member of it, I have read somewhere, to be able to sign his name. -- by Cyril Ray "Robert Mondavi of the Napa Valley" Robert Mondavi's father, Cesare, came from Sassafarento near Ancona, on the Adriatic coast of the Marches. It is not a particularly rich or fertile part of Italy even now, nor, except for Verdicchio, much of a wine-growing region, and a good deal less so, no doubt, in 1883, when Cesare was born. He was the son of a large, simple family and possibly the first member of it, I have read somewhere, to be able to sign his name. -- by Cyril Ray "Robert Mondavi of the Napa Valley"
2. Does this sentence work? If so, why? If not, please correct. The typical teenage user of snuff is white, active, and athletic, and subjected to very heavy peer pressure. The typical teenage user of snuff is white, active, athletic, and subjected to very heavy peer pressure.
3. Same instructions -- The children gathered around the clown wishing for a balloon, angling for a smile, bowing before the childhood consumerism. The children gathered around the clown, wishing for a balloon, angling for a smile, and bowing before the childhood consumerism.
In Frankenstein The first four letters and the preface I read weren't mainly about the story it covered the intention of the writing and background of the narrator the book starts with an exploration of the narrator and covers a lot of topics through his letters. For example loneliness risks taken by discovery of new knowledge, and etc it seems like the letters are foreshadowing whats coming up in the future of this book.
In Frankenstein, the first four letters and the preface I read weren't mainly about the story they covered or the intention of the writing or the background of the narrator. The book starts with an exploration of the narrator and covers a lot of topics through his letters. For example, loneliness is a risk taken by discovery of new knowledge and etc. It seems like the letters are foreshadowing whats coming up in the future of this book.
Dependent: Because I didn't do my homework, when the teach wanted me to turn it in, I was punished.
Repetition: The man who is responsible for his family was once a man in school just like his daughter, a man who was in the military just like his son.
1. Which of the following doesn't work? Why.
a. Bill played a musical number by Bach; Joan, Beethoven.
b. Lou Williams was in for adultery; John Jones for gambling.
c. His mother told him to rent a car; his sister, to pack the suitcases.
A doesn't match with the previous phrase.
2. Write your own original example.
The boy and girl each bought a new pair of shoes; hers, green ones; his, black ones.
3. Find one from something you have read (this may take a couple of weeks).
Exercise
Write a short 4-5 sentence paragraph concerning your reading about Frankenstein. Include a colon.
The first four letters and the preface I read weren't mainly about the story: It covered the intention of the writing and background of the narrator. It starts with an exploration of the narrator and covers a lot of topics through his letters. For example, loneliness, risks taken by discovery of new knowledge, and etc. It seems like the letters are foreshadowing what's coming up in the future of this book.
-- The following sentence has a lengthy series joined by repeated possessive pronouns. Do you think the sentenceis effective or weak? What feature contributes strength or detracts from te rhetorical effectiveness?
"Walled off from the roaring traffic of the Embankment and Fleet Street and High Holborn, each Inn is a self-centered community with its own gardens, lush with cherry and magnolia, camelia, and crocus; its own library; its own dining hall; its labyrinth of walks and lawns; its blocks of offices and flats let out mostly to barristers." Robert Wernick, Smithsonian, May 1992
I think it's a good sentence. The grammar's all right. (The way he labeled the title, etc) The sentence is descriptive and interesting. It's not boring. It's written in style. Thus I think it's an effective sentence. The repetition and rhyme makes the sentence flow smoothly. It's vivid descriptions make the sentence more effective. But it kind of sounds like a run on sentence.
Dec 1st
EXERCISE -- Copy and paste this entire exercise into your own page. Write your answers in a different color or font. We will chose two people's in class to go over.
1. Look carefully at the following sentence. Does it work? If so, why? If not, where can the sentence be broken into two or shorter ones that are not overwhelming.
Robert Mondavi's father, Cesare, came from Sassafarento near Ancona, on the Adriatic coast of the Marches -- not a particularly rich or fertile part of Italy even now, nor, except for Verdicchio, much of a wine-growing region, and a good deal less so, no doubt, in 1883, when Cesare was born, the son of a large, simple family and possibly the first member of it, I have read somewhere, to be able to sign his name. -- by Cyril Ray "Robert Mondavi of the Napa Valley"
Robert Mondavi's father, Cesare, came from Sassafarento near Ancona, on the Adriatic coast of the Marches. It is not a particularly rich or fertile part of Italy even now, nor, except for Verdicchio, much of a wine-growing region, and a good deal less so, no doubt, in 1883, when Cesare was born. He was the son of a large, simple family and possibly the first member of it, I have read somewhere, to be able to sign his name. -- by Cyril Ray "Robert Mondavi of the Napa Valley"
2. Does this sentence work? If so, why? If not, please correct. The typical teenage user of snuff is white, active, and athletic, and subjected to very heavy peer pressure.
The typical teenage user of snuff is white, active, athletic, and subjected to very heavy peer pressure.
3. Same instructions -- The children gathered around the clown wishing for a balloon, angling for a smile, bowing before the childhood consumerism.
The children gathered around the clown, wishing for a balloon, angling for a smile, and bowing before the childhood consumerism.
In Frankenstein The first four letters and the preface I read weren't mainly about the story it covered the intention of the writing and background of the narrator the book starts with an exploration of the narrator and covers a lot of topics through his letters. For example loneliness risks taken by discovery of new knowledge, and etc it seems like the letters are foreshadowing whats coming up in the future of this book.
In Frankenstein, the first four letters and the preface I read weren't mainly about the story they covered or the intention of the writing or the background of the narrator. The book starts with an exploration of the narrator and covers a lot of topics through his letters. For example, loneliness is a risk taken by discovery of new knowledge and etc. It seems like the letters are foreshadowing whats coming up in the future of this book.