January 13 1. Correct these sentences. In Frankenstein, the first four letters and the preface I read weren't mainly about the story; it covered the intention of the writing and background of the narrator. The book starts with an exploration of the narrator and covers a lot of topics through his letters. For example, loneliness risks taken by discovery of new knowledge, and etc. It seems like the letters are foreshadowing--whats coming up in the future of this book. -- Try for 3 sentences. There is a possibility of a colon AND a dashReflection + Author Book Podcast
(7) Ideas: Insight, Textual Support, Analysis Nice personal connections and your personal reactions helped the analysis.
(6) Organization: Thesis, easy to follow, flows, intro, body, conclusion
(5) Word Choice/Voice/Sentence Fluency: 5, very fluent and easy to listen to. Clearly, you had either practiced or had an outline. Each part flowed into the next.
(5) Technical Conventions: something extra, no extra time, I can hear you . . .
(7) You seem to have read the book
Book Comparison (Chinua Achebe):Things Fall Apart vs No Longer at Ease
1. No Longer at Ease's main character, Obi Okwonko is the grandson of Okwonko, who is the main character of Things Fall Apart.
2. The climax appears in middle. Big turning point which is always from good to bad. Things Fall Apart: Okwonko -> exile. No Longer at Ease: Obi->trial.
3. Though grandson of the great warrior who put masculinity and pride as priority, Obi doesn't seem to inherit much strength of Okwonko.
4. Both novel deals with a big change and its problem the main character is going through.
5. Racism as one of the main theme. Also, the title of the book is a message from Chinua Achebe, that can only be understood by reading the book.
Book Report
Things Fall Apart by Chinua Achebe
a. identify climax: Okwonko kills one of his fellow villagers in accident which leads to a ban for 7 years.
major conflict: Okwonko's interpretation of masculinity/power vs other's interpretation
resolution or denoument: Okwonko commits a suicide
what type of plot: Chronological Plot
b. comment about setting: Among many villages, Okwonko's village, Umofia, is known to be the most powerful. They take
power and honor as the most important factors that represent masculinity.
c. identify one major symbol: Locust (just like Okwonko, it is powerful enough to break things and it is capable of taking big leaps. Okwonko took 3 big leaps by killing Ikemefuna, villager, and himself. Also, Okwonko failed to settle himself permanently as locusts wander around from trees to trees)
identify one minor symbol: Ikemefuna (Okwonko falls into a conflict between his love toward Ikemefuna and his fame/power. Although he wasn't required to do the killing himself, he killed his son to show his masculinity)
d. discuss two characters. Label as round or flat, dynamic or static. Are they archetypal or foils?: Okwonko is rather a flat character. Although many chances were given to him to change, he never did. He was always taking masculinity as his first priority. Okwonko is archetypal, perhaps too archetypal. Power and fame were the most important elements in Umofia, and Okwonko followed it strictly.
Umofians are dynamic. When Okwonko was in Umofia and represented Umofia as the most powerful village, villagers too took pride and responsibility in keeping their positions. But Okwonko's absence for 7 years have changed them dramatically which eventually led to Okwonko's death.
e. Open to the exact middle. What page? Write one paragraph about how this one page relates thematically, symbolically,or other (just not all plot) to the rest of the book.
page 112. Okwonko didn't sleep or rest because he was worried about Ezinma. However, he doesn't show his anxiety to anyone. He acts normal, strong and big as usual. Okwonko, although is quite warm in heart, never changes. He always fall into a conflict between his masculinity and his humanity. He thinks that showing emotion is a way of killing his masculinity and showing weakness is a sin. He didn't blink an eye when he killed his son Ikemefuna, nor did he dare to show tears when his daughter was sick to death. Okwonko's interpretation of masculinity torments him and eventually kills him in the end.
Writing about meal in Bradbury style.
At lunch, as I was reluctantly perambulating down the stairs to devour savor-less product, I noticed that JJ's had given birth to another unstable content. When will their experiment come to a demise? Though my stomach produced the low octave growling, my instinct countered with a teleological argument not to eat the substance they so address fajita. I consumed it, did not like it, regretted it.
Vocab Gambit: A remark made to open or redirect a conversation Sentence: In The Fly by Katherine Mansfield, Mr. Woodfield and his boss/friend use gambit to bring about 2 different topics. Mr. Woodfield uses it after taking a drink of whiskey to mention about his daughters' visit to their sons' grave. His boss uses it to inform the readers about his son's
Bold
death.
Inveterate: settled or confirmed in a habit, practice, feeling, or the like Sentence: The student who has been cheating on exams for years have developed a inveterate lying skill.
Pinguid: of the nature or resembling fat; oily; greasy Sentence: Chili cheese fries served in Carl's Jr are very pinguid.
Teleological: the explanation of phenomena by the purpose they serve rather than by postulated causes. Sentence: Teleological arguments between extreme Christians and Atheists never seemed to reach a conclusion.
Sophism: fallacious argument used to deceive. Sentence: Sophism created by two children turned out to be a massive parent war.I
Endemic: regularly found among particular people
homosexuality is far from being accepted as a practice
'darkness' follows the abnormal sexual behavior (gay and lesbian)
masturbation is an inveterate awakening in homosexuality that is non-endemic
masturbation = metamorphosis, for ex, the sticky goo created by Gregor Sama, is the result of his masturbation
Castration: internalization of sexual difference Inculcate: instill (an attitude, behavior, etc) by persistent instruction
Diaphanus: characterized by such fineness of texture as to permit seeing through Rapacious: aggressively greedy
Males are depicted to be dominant. For sports such as wrestling, it is very male-dominant. Women, in other hand, or used as an erotic visual aids. When you watch a wrestling on TV, there will always be near-naked women there to either show the score or cheer with exaggerated gestures that is way beyond PG-13 nudity level. In male-dominant events, such as wrestling, women are just utensils.
Epicurean: a person devoted to sensual enjoyment derived from fine food and drink Iniquity: immoral or unfair behavior
Emissary- a person sent on a special mission sentence: Group of emissaries were selected to rescue Private Ryan. Cipher- to use numeric or arithmetic figures sentence: John was shocked because he didn't understand any of his professor's ciphering
another sentence: The rapacious man refused to pay a cent for his friend's birthday gift.
Preposition and Repetition: "from the people, of the people, by the people" said President Lincoln.
Dependent Clause: I studied when I heard the noise.
Repetition: It's not the situation, it's your reaction to the situation.
Nov 2, 2009
1. Which of the following doesn't work? Why.
A and C doesn't work because after semi-colon, there should be a complete sentence.
a. Bill played a musical number by Bach; Joan, Beethoven.
b. Lou Williams was in for adultery; John Jones for gambling.
c. His mother told him to rent a car; his sister, to pack the suitcases.
2. Write your own original example.
Mike Bock is a good boy; he listens to his mother
3. Find one from something you have read (this may take a couple of weeks).
Nov 4, 2009
Scarlet Letter A many meanings: adulterer, angel and able.
You heard what he said: It's not the situation, it's your reaction to the situation.
President Lincoln's famous quote keeps its fame even today: from the people, of the people, by the people.
There are many reasons why AP Literature is fun: Ms. Porter teaches it and many discussions take place.
Nov 10, 2009
-- The following sentence has a lengthy series joined by repeated possessive pronouns. Do you think the sentenceis effective or weak? What feature contributes strength or detracts from te rhetorical effectiveness?
Sentence is very effective in creating imagery. Its combination of lengthy descriptions is very detailed and precise that readers can create their own map of it. As for rhetorical effectiveness, I think it creates more twists and sounds reading this type of structure rather than plain subject verb adj object structured sentence.
"Walled off from the roaring traffic of the Embankment and Fleet Street and High Holborn, each Inn is a self-centered community with its own gardens, lush with cherry and magnolia, camelia, and crocus; its own library; its own dining hall; its labyrinth of walks and lawns; its blocks of offices and flats let out mostly to barristers." Robert Wernick, Smithsonian, May 1992
Dec 1,2009
1. Look carefully at the following sentence. Does it work? If so, why? If not, where can the sentence be broken into two or shorter ones that are not overwhelming.
No, There is way too much unnecessary description. Many of these descriptions can be deleted without reflecting the meaning or intention of this paragraph. A good break would be after the part explaining about Sassafarento.
I don't think the sentence works.
Robert Mondavi's father, Cesare, came from Sassafarento near Ancona, on the Adriatic coast of the Marches -- not a particularly rich or fertile part of Italy even now, nor, except for Verdicchio, much of a wine-growing region, and a good deal less so, no doubt, in 1883, when Cesare was born, the son of a large, simple family and possibly the first member of it, I have read somewhere, to be able to sign his name. -- by Cyril Ray "Robert Mondavi of the Napa Valley"
2. Does this sentence work? If so, why? If not, please correct. The typical teenage user of snuff is white, active, and athletic, and subjected to very heavy peer pressure. No, the adjectives "white, active and athletic" doesn't correspond with the description "subjected to very heavy peer pressure" in the rule of parallelism, a conjunction "and" would work.
3. Same instructions -- The children gathered around the clown wishing for a balloon, angling for a smile, bowing before the childhood consumerism. Yes. It matches the rules of parallelism.
Jan 11, 2010
Food and culture holds a simulacrum; they are not the same thing but interconnected
Blogs
1) http://bigbluebarnwest.blogspot.com/
I would definitely give 5 thumbs up to this blog. We all know that college essay has something to with representing thyself in a positive way. But this person takes further step than that. Whehn you read this blog, you can feel that you are being convinced by this person. This person has the ability to absorb the readers so much that by the end of each article, readers will most likely agree. I believe that it what college essays should be, convincing college admission officers that you would be great for their school.
2) http://youthtrain.blogspot.com/2008/07/students-need-sleep-to-succeed.html
It makes a firm stand on a question: How many hours do student need to sleep. It actually starts directly with its opinion and you can notice it just by looking at the title. This blogger quotes a professor of University in health studies to reinforce his point. I agree with us (students) needing more sleeps and this person has actually made me believe in it more strongly. (I did leave a comment, but the blogger needs to approve my comment first so it may not be there by tmrw)
3) http://massoffat.blogs.experienceproject.com/
The topic this blogger decides to bring out is quite creepy and awkward, however, she makes a straight point. I like to note this as a 'good' writing because she succeeded in making her point absolute despite the topic is rather stupid. It is similar to when you are debating against "Rape is a serious crime" and winning.
January 13 1. Correct these sentences. In Frankenstein, the first four letters and the preface I read weren't mainly about the story; it covered the intention of the writing and background of the narrator. The book starts with an exploration of the narrator and covers a lot of topics through his letters. For example, loneliness risks taken by discovery of new knowledge, and etc. It seems like the letters are foreshadowing--whats coming up in the future of this book. -- Try for 3 sentences. There is a possibility of a colon AND a dash Reflection + Author Book Podcast
(7) Ideas: Insight, Textual Support, Analysis Nice personal connections and your personal reactions helped the analysis.
(6) Organization: Thesis, easy to follow, flows, intro, body, conclusion
(5) Word Choice/Voice/Sentence Fluency: 5, very fluent and easy to listen to. Clearly, you had either practiced or had an outline. Each part flowed into the next.
(5) Technical Conventions: something extra, no extra time, I can hear you . . .
(7) You seem to have read the book
Total (30) 30
Book Comparison (Chinua Achebe): Things Fall Apart vs No Longer at Ease
1. No Longer at Ease's main character, Obi Okwonko is the grandson of Okwonko, who is the main character of Things Fall Apart.
2. The climax appears in middle. Big turning point which is always from good to bad. Things Fall Apart: Okwonko -> exile. No Longer at Ease: Obi->trial.
3. Though grandson of the great warrior who put masculinity and pride as priority, Obi doesn't seem to inherit much strength of Okwonko.
4. Both novel deals with a big change and its problem the main character is going through.
5. Racism as one of the main theme. Also, the title of the book is a message from Chinua Achebe, that can only be understood by reading the book.
Book Report
Things Fall Apart by Chinua AchebeWriting about meal in Bradbury style.
At lunch, as I was reluctantly perambulating down the stairs to devour savor-less product, I noticed that JJ's had given birth to another unstable content. When will their experiment come to a demise? Though my stomach produced the low octave growling, my instinct countered with a teleological argument not to eat the substance they so address fajita. I consumed it, did not like it, regretted it.My blog
http://jerryl10.edublogs.orgVocab
Gambit: A remark made to open or redirect a conversation
Sentence: In The Fly by Katherine Mansfield, Mr. Woodfield and his boss/friend use gambit to bring about 2 different topics. Mr. Woodfield uses it after taking a drink of whiskey to mention about his daughters' visit to their sons' grave. His boss uses it to inform the readers about his son's
Inveterate: settled or confirmed in a habit, practice, feeling, or the like
Sentence: The student who has been cheating on exams for years have developed a inveterate lying skill.
Pinguid: of the nature or resembling fat; oily; greasy
Sentence: Chili cheese fries served in Carl's Jr are very pinguid.
Teleological: the explanation of phenomena by the purpose they serve rather than by postulated causes.
Sentence: Teleological arguments between extreme Christians and Atheists never seemed to reach a conclusion.
Sophism: fallacious argument used to deceive.
Sentence: Sophism created by two children turned out to be a massive parent war.I
Endemic: regularly found among particular people
Castration: internalization of sexual difference
Inculcate: instill (an attitude, behavior, etc) by persistent instruction
Diaphanus: characterized by such fineness of texture as to permit seeing through
Rapacious: aggressively greedy
Males are depicted to be dominant. For sports such as wrestling, it is very male-dominant. Women, in other hand, or used as an erotic visual aids. When you watch a wrestling on TV, there will always be near-naked women there to either show the score or cheer with exaggerated gestures that is way beyond PG-13 nudity level. In male-dominant events, such as wrestling, women are just utensils.
Epicurean: a person devoted to sensual enjoyment derived from fine food and drink
Iniquity: immoral or unfair behavior
Emissary- a person sent on a special mission
sentence: Group of emissaries were selected to rescue Private Ryan.
Cipher- to use numeric or arithmetic figures
sentence: John was shocked because he didn't understand any of his professor's ciphering
another sentence: The rapacious man refused to pay a cent for his friend's birthday gift.
Preposition and Repetition: "from the people, of the people, by the people" said President Lincoln.
Dependent Clause: I studied when I heard the noise.
Repetition: It's not the situation, it's your reaction to the situation.
Nov 2, 2009
1. Which of the following doesn't work? Why.
A and C doesn't work because after semi-colon, there should be a complete sentence.
a. Bill played a musical number by Bach; Joan, Beethoven.
b. Lou Williams was in for adultery; John Jones for gambling.
c. His mother told him to rent a car; his sister, to pack the suitcases.
2. Write your own original example.
Mike Bock is a good boy; he listens to his mother
3. Find one from something you have read (this may take a couple of weeks).
Nov 4, 2009
Nov 10, 2009
-- The following sentence has a lengthy series joined by repeated possessive pronouns. Do you think the sentenceis effective or weak? What feature contributes strength or detracts from te rhetorical effectiveness?
Sentence is very effective in creating imagery. Its combination of lengthy descriptions is very detailed and precise that readers can create their own map of it. As for rhetorical effectiveness, I think it creates more twists and sounds reading this type of structure rather than plain subject verb adj object structured sentence.
"Walled off from the roaring traffic of the Embankment and Fleet Street and High Holborn, each Inn is a self-centered community with its own gardens, lush with cherry and magnolia, camelia, and crocus; its own library; its own dining hall; its labyrinth of walks and lawns; its blocks of offices and flats let out mostly to barristers." Robert Wernick, Smithsonian, May 1992
Dec 1,2009
1. Look carefully at the following sentence. Does it work? If so, why? If not, where can the sentence be broken into two or shorter ones that are not overwhelming.
No, There is way too much unnecessary description. Many of these descriptions can be deleted without reflecting the meaning or intention of this paragraph. A good break would be after the part explaining about Sassafarento.
I don't think the sentence works.
Robert Mondavi's father, Cesare, came from Sassafarento near Ancona, on the Adriatic coast of the Marches -- not a particularly rich or fertile part of Italy even now, nor, except for Verdicchio, much of a wine-growing region, and a good deal less so, no doubt, in 1883, when Cesare was born, the son of a large, simple family and possibly the first member of it, I have read somewhere, to be able to sign his name. -- by Cyril Ray "Robert Mondavi of the Napa Valley"
2. Does this sentence work? If so, why? If not, please correct. The typical teenage user of snuff is white, active, and athletic, and subjected to very heavy peer pressure. No, the adjectives "white, active and athletic" doesn't correspond with the description "subjected to very heavy peer pressure" in the rule of parallelism, a conjunction "and" would work.
3. Same instructions -- The children gathered around the clown wishing for a balloon, angling for a smile, bowing before the childhood consumerism. Yes. It matches the rules of parallelism.
Jan 11, 2010
Food and culture holds a simulacrum; they are not the same thing but interconnected
Blogs
1) http://bigbluebarnwest.blogspot.com/
I would definitely give 5 thumbs up to this blog. We all know that college essay has something to with representing thyself in a positive way. But this person takes further step than that. Whehn you read this blog, you can feel that you are being convinced by this person. This person has the ability to absorb the readers so much that by the end of each article, readers will most likely agree. I believe that it what college essays should be, convincing college admission officers that you would be great for their school.
2) http://youthtrain.blogspot.com/2008/07/students-need-sleep-to-succeed.html
It makes a firm stand on a question: How many hours do student need to sleep. It actually starts directly with its opinion and you can notice it just by looking at the title. This blogger quotes a professor of University in health studies to reinforce his point. I agree with us (students) needing more sleeps and this person has actually made me believe in it more strongly. (I did leave a comment, but the blogger needs to approve my comment first so it may not be there by tmrw)
3) http://massoffat.blogs.experienceproject.com/
The topic this blogger decides to bring out is quite creepy and awkward, however, she makes a straight point. I like to note this as a 'good' writing because she succeeded in making her point absolute despite the topic is rather stupid. It is similar to when you are debating against "Rape is a serious crime" and winning.