Five similarities between The Old Man and the Sea and Farewell to Arms
1) the story evolves around male characters (rather with masculine characteristics)
2) both main characters encounter some kind of force or event that make humans appear helpless
(war / the nature (the wide ocean) )
3) in the end, nothing is really gained despite all the struggles
(the wife of the main character in Farewell to Arms dies / most (virtually all) of the flesh the fish that the old man caught is taken away by sharks)
4) both main characters refer to the Bible and God, yet they are not religious at all.
5) weather factors are significant, as it marks the separation
(when the wife dies, it rains / when the flesh of the fish gets taken away, winds blow fiercely.)
Examples
It took courage, skill, knowledge -- and he had them all.
Their friendship has endured, in spite of arguments, boyfriends, distance.
I have come to you withoutsin, without guile, without evil, without a witness against me." - The Book of the Dead
EXERCISE -- Copy and paste this entire exercise into your own page. Write your answers in a different color or font. We will chose two people's in class to go over.
1. Look carefully at the following sentence. Does it work? If so, why? If not, where can the sentence be broken into two or shorter ones that are not overwhelming.
Robert Mondavi's father, Cesare, came from Sassafarento near Ancona, on the Adriatic coast of the Marches -- not a particularly rich or fertile part of Italy even now, nor, except for Verdicchio, much of a wine-growing region, and a good deal less so, no doubt, in 1883, when Cesare was born, the son of a large, simple family and possibly the first member of it, I have read somewhere, to be able to sign his name. -- by Cyril Ray "Robert Mondavi of the Napa Valley"
I feel like the sentence is too long, failing to emphasize its point and leaving readers (especially me) confused. I will break the sentence before "in 1883" get rid of "I have read somewhere" (or use parenthesis as there are too many commas that have been used already).
2. Does this sentence work? If so, why? If not, please correct. The typical teenage user of snuff is white, active, and athletic, and subjected to very heavy peer pressure.
I would omit "and" before the adjective athletic, because as the omission would bring a quick, staccato sound to the sentence.
3. Same instructions -- The children gathered around the clown wishing for a balloon, angling for a smile, bowing before the childhood consumerism.
I would use a conjunction in this sentence, because the three phrases are not so concise, thus failing to give the quick, staccato sound in the first place.
on/about
Will you give me your notes on Frankenstein?
I'm discussing Frankenstein?
The discussion on Frankenstein was interesting.
The following sentence has a lengthy series joined by repeated possessive pronouns. Do you think the sentence is effective or weak? What feature contributes strength or detracts from te rhetorical effectiveness?
"Walled off from the roaring traffic of the Embankment and Fleet Street and High Holborn, each Inn is a self-centered community with its own gardens, lush with cherry and magnolia, camelia, and crocus; its own library; its own dining hall; its labyrinth of walks and lawns; its blocks of offices and flats let out mostly to barristers." Robert Wernick,Smithsonian, May 1992
- The sentence is effective, as the writer intends to emphasize the numerous facilities. The punctuation (semi-colon) does divide each part of Inn, and this sense of division gives the audience the impression that the place is indeed "self-centered." However, this style of sentence, if overused, will hinder the overall flow of the writing.
Parallelism -
1) preposition
- After the sun went down and before the star went up, she returned from the woods.
2) dependent clauses ( Mark Twain example: Now when I have mastered the language of the water, when I have wejrklwjeklrjkle, when I have wlkrlewkje, I was able to ...)
- I love KIS, where my friends smile, where my teachers guide us, where I feel happy.
Repetition - repeat the key term.
1) You have the right to do the right thing.
Larger Assignment: Blog entries with these sentence structures.
COMPOUND SENTENCE WITH ELLIPTICAL CONSTRUCTION(comma indicates the omitted verb)
S V DO ; S , DO
We like classical music; those guys , rock.
Be sure that each sentence really has two independent clauses in it (even thought the second has an unexpressed verb).
Be sure that the verb omitted in the second clause matches exactly, in form and tense, the verb in the first clause.
Use a semicolon if there is no conjunction; if there is a conjunction, many writers use a comma. A semicolon does not go with a coordinating conjunction.
1. Which of the following doesn't work? Why.
a. Bill played a musical number by Bach; Joan, Beethoven. b. Lou Williams was in for adultery; John Jones for gambling. (No comma)
c. His mother told him to rent a car; his sister, to pack the suitcases.
2. Write your own original example.
- I went to the Halloween Social; Peter, to the PC room.
3. Find one from something you have read (this may take a couple of weeks).
Colon
The story begins with a series of letters. Such a style of narration provides the audience a special perspective: we are limited as we have to perceive events, characters, and settings only from one person's eyes, ears, and heart. Yet it is the feeling of limited vision that arouses further curiosity, building up the suspense. Now that the stranger opens his mouth to reveal recollections. we will get to explore the past from a different character's point of view.
castration
1) to remove the testes of; emasculate; geld
2) to render impotent, literally or metaphorically, by psychological means, esp. by threatening a person's masculinity or femininity
3) to deprive of strength, power, or efficiency; weaken
inculcate
1) to implant by repeated statement or admonition; teach persistently and earnestly
2) to cause or influence (someone) to accept an idea or feeling
In subtle psychological sense, the male of the modern world has been inculcated by both culture and societal norms to view women as rather inferior than their own gender. The theory of castration complex holds an interesting idea: men (when they view women's genitals) does not think that they are simply different from those of their own, but actually think that women are "lacking" what they possess. This concept of lacking something makes men feel superior, as they feel like they own more than women.
epicurean
1) fond of or adapted to luxury or indulgence in sensual pleasures; having luxurious tastes or habits, esp. in eating and drinking
iniquity
1) gross injustice or wickedness
2) a violation of right or duty; wicked act; sin
diaphanous
1) very sheer and light; almost completely transparent or translucent
2)delicately hazy
rapacious
1) given to seizing for plunder or the satisfaction of greed
2) inordinately greedy; predatory; extortionate: a rapacious disposition.
emissary
1) a representative sent on a mission or errand: emissaries to negotiate a peace
2) an agent sent on a mission of a secret nature, as a spy
cipher
1) (verb) to use figures or numerals arithmetically
2) (noun) any of the Arabic numerals or figures
3) (noun) a secret message
SENTENCES
The emissary sent the information in cipher.
mizzen- noting a sail, yard, boom, etc., or any rigging belonging to a mizzen lower mast or to some upper mast of a mizzenmast
veneration- respect
varnished- to give an improved appearance to; adorn.
sepulchre- a tomb, grave, or burial place
Gambit
1) an opening in which a player seeks to obtain some advantage by sacrificing a pawn or piece.
2) an action or set of actions, which you carry out in order to try to gain an advantage in a situation or game. 3) Synonyms:ploy, stratagem, scheme, ruse
4) The Fly by Katherine Mansfield
The fly falls in the ink pot, manages to escape death narrowly, yet encounters more adversities imposed by the man. The fly is not just a fly. Yes, it’s symbolic (of course). Human insignificance and hopelessness that people (and the son of the man) faced during the daunting WWI are expressed through the fly’s struggle. The fly unceasingly makes the effort to survive in the face of ink drop attacks. Unfortunately, the effort is not enough--not enough to save the poor thing. Any kind of gambit, strategy, or trick planned by humans cannot bring them ultimate victory: in the face of deadly weapon, which ironically is created by the mankind, and the death that no one can manage to escape from.
inveterate
1) settled or confirmed in a habit, practice, feeling, or the like: an inveterate gambler.
2) firmly established by long continuance, as a disease, habit, practice, feeling, etc.; chronic.
*sentence*
Harry never stopped cheating. He was an inveterate cheater.
pinguid
1) fat or oily
*sentence*
Your face is pinguid, and it doesn't fit with your slim body.
teleological
1) the doctrine that final causes exist.
2) the study of the evidences of design or purpose in nature.
3) moving forward in a purposeful manner * Happy Ending* -> everyone dies.
sophism
1) a specious argument for displaying ingenuity in reasoning or for deceiving someone.
2) any false argument; fallacy.
The whole story of Tlon is a sophism. Tlon is a fantasy world, yet its descriptions sound so realistic that it feels far different from Narnia, Wonderland, or those la-la lands of fantasy fictions. Referring to The Anglo-American Cyclopaedia, the narrator introduces Tlon to the readers as if it is an actually existing place.
-The Boston common a public area in downtown Boston is the main setting for the short story the patriot which is about a man who argues to such an extent that it became _ (vocab word).
endemic
1.) If a disease or illness is endemic in a place, it is frequently found among the people who live there.
2.) If you say that a condition or problem is endemic, you mean that it is very common and strong, and cannot be dealt with easily.
Journal Entry
- The concepts of male supremacy and homophobia are not endemic to American society. However, what makes such concepts so ironic is the fact that the United States is a nation that has been crying out for ultimate equality, individual freedom, and liberty since its foundation.
- Breen bravely explores the sexualities that are apparent in the Metamorphosis.
- Masturbation is indirectly delivered through the imagery of one scene, in which other human characters cannot say a word or describe what he is doing, for his act of masturbation is an established taboo in the culture.
A word
Book Report
Five similarities between The Old Man and the Sea and Farewell to Arms
1) the story evolves around male characters (rather with masculine characteristics)
2) both main characters encounter some kind of force or event that make humans appear helpless
(war / the nature (the wide ocean) )
3) in the end, nothing is really gained despite all the struggles
(the wife of the main character in Farewell to Arms dies / most (virtually all) of the flesh the fish that the old man caught is taken away by sharks)
4) both main characters refer to the Bible and God, yet they are not religious at all.
5) weather factors are significant, as it marks the separation
(when the wife dies, it rains / when the flesh of the fish gets taken away, winds blow fiercely.)
Examples
It took courage, skill, knowledge -- and he had them all.
Their friendship has endured, in spite of arguments, boyfriends, distance.
I have come to you withoutsin, without guile, without evil, without a witness against me." - The Book of the Dead
EXERCISE -- Copy and paste this entire exercise into your own page. Write your answers in a different color or font. We will chose two people's in class to go over.
1. Look carefully at the following sentence. Does it work? If so, why? If not, where can the sentence be broken into two or shorter ones that are not overwhelming.
Robert Mondavi's father, Cesare, came from Sassafarento near Ancona, on the Adriatic coast of the Marches -- not a particularly rich or fertile part of Italy even now, nor, except for Verdicchio, much of a wine-growing region, and a good deal less so, no doubt, in 1883, when Cesare was born, the son of a large, simple family and possibly the first member of it, I have read somewhere, to be able to sign his name. -- by Cyril Ray "Robert Mondavi of the Napa Valley"
I feel like the sentence is too long, failing to emphasize its point and leaving readers (especially me) confused. I will break the sentence before "in 1883" get rid of "I have read somewhere" (or use parenthesis as there are too many commas that have been used already).
2. Does this sentence work? If so, why? If not, please correct. The typical teenage user of snuff is white, active, and athletic, and subjected to very heavy peer pressure.
I would omit "and" before the adjective athletic, because as the omission would bring a quick, staccato sound to the sentence.
3. Same instructions -- The children gathered around the clown wishing for a balloon, angling for a smile, bowing before the childhood consumerism.
I would use a conjunction in this sentence, because the three phrases are not so concise, thus failing to give the quick, staccato sound in the first place.
Will you give me your notes on Frankenstein?
I'm discussing Frankenstein?
The discussion on Frankenstein was interesting.
"Walled off from the roaring traffic of the Embankment and Fleet Street and High Holborn, each Inn is a self-centered community with its own gardens, lush with cherry and magnolia, camelia, and crocus; its own library; its own dining hall; its labyrinth of walks and lawns; its blocks of offices and flats let out mostly to barristers." Robert Wernick,Smithsonian, May 1992
- The sentence is effective, as the writer intends to emphasize the numerous facilities. The punctuation (semi-colon) does divide each part of Inn, and this sense of division gives the audience the impression that the place is indeed "self-centered." However, this style of sentence, if overused, will hinder the overall flow of the writing.
- Parallelism -
1) preposition- After the sun went down and before the star went up, she returned from the woods.
2) dependent clauses ( Mark Twain example: Now when I have mastered the language of the water, when I have wejrklwjeklrjkle, when I have wlkrlewkje, I was able to ...)
- I love KIS, where my friends smile, where my teachers guide us, where I feel happy.
- Repetition - repeat the key term.
1) You have the right to do the right thing.Larger Assignment: Blog entries with these sentence structures.
- COMPOUND SENTENCE WITH ELLIPTICAL CONSTRUCTION(comma indicates the omitted verb)
S V DO ; S , DOWe like classical music; those guys , rock.
1. Which of the following doesn't work? Why.
a. Bill played a musical number by Bach; Joan, Beethoven.
b. Lou Williams was in for adultery; John Jones for gambling. (No comma)
c. His mother told him to rent a car; his sister, to pack the suitcases.
2. Write your own original example.
- I went to the Halloween Social; Peter, to the PC room.
3. Find one from something you have read (this may take a couple of weeks).
- Colon
The story begins with a series of letters. Such a style of narration provides the audience a special perspective: we are limited as we have to perceive events, characters, and settings only from one person's eyes, ears, and heart. Yet it is the feeling of limited vision that arouses further curiosity, building up the suspense. Now that the stranger opens his mouth to reveal recollections. we will get to explore the past from a different character's point of view.- castration
1) to remove the testes of; emasculate; geld2) to render impotent, literally or metaphorically, by psychological means, esp. by threatening a person's masculinity or femininity
3) to deprive of strength, power, or efficiency; weaken
- inculcate
1) to implant by repeated statement or admonition; teach persistently and earnestly2) to cause or influence (someone) to accept an idea or feeling
In subtle psychological sense, the male of the modern world has been inculcated by both culture and societal norms to view women as rather inferior than their own gender. The theory of castration complex holds an interesting idea: men (when they view women's genitals) does not think that they are simply different from those of their own, but actually think that women are "lacking" what they possess. This concept of lacking something makes men feel superior, as they feel like they own more than women.
- epicurean
1) fond of or adapted to luxury or indulgence in sensual pleasures; having luxurious tastes or habits, esp. in eating and drinking1) gross injustice or wickedness
2) a violation of right or duty; wicked act; sin
- diaphanous
1) very sheer and light; almost completely transparent or translucent2)delicately hazy
- rapacious
1) given to seizing for plunder or the satisfaction of greed2) inordinately greedy; predatory; extortionate: a rapacious disposition.
1) a representative sent on a mission or errand: emissaries to negotiate a peace
2) an agent sent on a mission of a secret nature, as a spy
- cipher
1) (verb) to use figures or numerals arithmetically2) (noun) any of the Arabic numerals or figures
3) (noun) a secret message
SENTENCES
- Gambit
1) an opening in which a player seeks to obtain some advantage by sacrificing a pawn or piece.2) an action or set of actions, which you carry out in order to try to gain an advantage in a situation or game.
3) Synonyms: ploy, stratagem, scheme, ruse
4) The Fly by Katherine Mansfield
The fly falls in the ink pot, manages to escape death narrowly, yet encounters more adversities imposed by the man. The fly is not just a fly. Yes, it’s symbolic (of course). Human insignificance and hopelessness that people (and the son of the man) faced during the daunting WWI are expressed through the fly’s struggle. The fly unceasingly makes the effort to survive in the face of ink drop attacks. Unfortunately, the effort is not enough--not enough to save the poor thing. Any kind of gambit, strategy, or trick planned by humans cannot bring them ultimate victory: in the face of deadly weapon, which ironically is created by the mankind, and the death that no one can manage to escape from.
- inveterate
1) settled or confirmed in a habit, practice, feeling, or the like: an inveterate gambler.2) firmly established by long continuance, as a disease, habit, practice, feeling, etc.; chronic.
*sentence*
Harry never stopped cheating. He was an inveterate cheater.
- pinguid
1) fat or oily*sentence*
Your face is pinguid, and it doesn't fit with your slim body.
- teleological
1) the doctrine that final causes exist.2) the study of the evidences of design or purpose in nature.
3) moving forward in a purposeful manner * Happy Ending* -> everyone dies.
1) a specious argument for displaying ingenuity in reasoning or for deceiving someone.
2) any false argument; fallacy.
The whole story of Tlon is a sophism. Tlon is a fantasy world, yet its descriptions sound so realistic that it feels far different from Narnia, Wonderland, or those la-la lands of fantasy fictions. Referring to The Anglo-American Cyclopaedia, the narrator introduces Tlon to the readers as if it is an actually existing place.
-The Boston common a public area in downtown Boston is the main setting for the short story the patriot which is about a man who argues to such an extent that it became _ (vocab word).
- endemic
1.) If a disease or illness is endemic in a place, it is frequently found among the people who live there.2.) If you say that a condition or problem is endemic, you mean that it is very common and strong, and cannot be dealt with easily.
Journal Entry
- The concepts of male supremacy and homophobia are not endemic to American society. However, what makes such concepts so ironic is the fact that the United States is a nation that has been crying out for ultimate equality, individual freedom, and liberty since its foundation.
- Breen bravely explores the sexualities that are apparent in the Metamorphosis.
- Masturbation is indirectly delivered through the imagery of one scene, in which other human characters cannot say a word or describe what he is doing, for his act of masturbation is an established taboo in the culture.